The secret to a great antagonist – character backstory – writing

You don’t really understand an antagonist until you understand why he’s a protagonist in his own version of the world ~ John Rogers

Everyone, good or bad, acts within the bounds of their personal belief system. Understanding that our antagonist sees his or her actions as justified, or even reasonable is a fascinating insight to have. Do they act to survive, be it financial or physical survival? Do they not know any better? secret

Character backstory is a vital collection of information we use to make decisions on how our characters act, and more importantly why. When we create a strong connection between our antagonist’s actions and their backstory we create a strong and believable antagonist.

When we write it is natural for the focus to be on the protagonist—it is their story after all. But I think the antagonist and their life journey is just as essential to producing a great book, and a believable source of conflict.

Few people are quintessentially bad; some are, but not many. Others are an eclectic mix of motivations that can drive them to risk their life to save an abused dog, only to stab a human victim without any seeming remorse.

Many are driven into the role through circumstance, situation, or the cards that they have been dealt. Perhaps they are hardened to cope with a hard world, unloved, or miss-understood. Perhaps they don’t know anything else.

Whatever wicked or cruel things we intend our antagonist to do, we should consider how it fits within their belief system. This belief system is established by their life journey and the events that can happen either before or during the book.

A childhood trauma:

  • Cruel parents
  • No parents
  • Violent neighborhood
  • Other abuse

It could be a survival instinct:

  • If there is only food for one
  • The last seat in the escape pod
  • The last shot of antidote

end of the world

It could be something physical:

  • A blow to the head that changes their personality
  • Drugs, alcohol and other addictions
  • A disease that wracks their body with pain and drives them mad
  • A deteriorating mental condition that is not noticed or goes untreated
  • A mental disorder such as psychopaths, sociopaths.

A traumatic event:

  • War
  • Famine, and other natural disasters
  • The loss of a loved one through violence or even through natural causes
  • Betrayal

natural disaster

Faith, religious or otherwise:

  • Event causing them to lose faith
  • Events causing them to gain faith
  • Losing faith in an important role model such as father-figure, priest, teacher, best friend
  • Faith in the wrong kind of mentor, such as organized crime
  • Faith in what seems like the right kind of mentor but who is underhand or misleading

Culture and Society

These can be considered whether in the modern world, historical fiction, or futuristic fiction. Anywhere cultures, worlds, or people collide the common belief of what is right or wrong could prove very different.

  • Societal: what may seem cruel now may have been considered normal and commonplace a hundred years ago
  • Cultural: corporal punishment for stealing is considered cruel in some cultures and normal in others.

You can also combine the causes.

  • For example not every psychopath is a killer—it’s a well known fact that many excel in the corporate world where their personality style allows them to make cold calculating decisions without any apparent remorse—and excellent antagonist material already. However, a psychopath who was abused as a child is much more likely to go on to become a killer.
  • What about a man who suffered childhood abuse, and then loses his beloved grandmother who was the only person keeping him on the straight.

Asking yourself why your antagonist is doing what he or she is doing—taking the time to really get inside their sullied head—will add depth to your story and create a believable backdrop for your hero to excel.

Another interesting consideration is that many of these life challenges can also provide a test for our protagonist, and overcoming them is what makes them so great.

Master list of words / phrases to avoid #amwriting #amediting

Here is my list of words to avoid when writing with an explanation for each about alternatives and / or why. I don’t want to turn this into a thesaurus, we have a bounty of applications that can do a much better job, but I have popped some alternatives in where it helps to explain the point.

I make a pass through my manuscript for each of these words / phrases, and explore each one. There are generally 4 options:

  • Leave it
  • Remove it
  • Replace it with a more specific word
  • Rework the sentence

Master list of words / phrases to avoid

  1. A lot of – Alt. Many.
  2. Across – Overused word. If it is movement, consider how to better show movement.
  3. All – Overused word. Alt. Each, copious.
  4. Almost, always, already, anymore – Check each one, they are often redundant and can be removed.
  5. Came, came to – Alt. Arrived.
  6. Carried on – Alt. Reached.
  7. Different – Overused word / Ambiguous word. Ask how / why the thing is different. It may give you hints.
  8. Feel, feeling, felt – Telling word. All kind of alternative here For example, Feel sorry for = pity. Feel better = comfort.
  9. Good – Overused word / Ambiguous word. Ask how / why the thing is good. It may give you hints.
  10. Large, Big – Overused word. Alt. Huge, massive, vast, high, tall etc.
  11. Looked like – Alt. Appeared, resembled etc.
  12. Look / look at –  Overused word. Alt. Regard, watch, study, inspect etc
  13. ly – Main adverbs. Check for better verbs.
  14. New – Overused word. Alt. Latest, recent.
  15. Next to – Alt. Beside, against.
  16. Old – Overused word. Alt. Ancient, decrepit, decaying, elderly etc.
  17. Right – Overused word / Ambiguous word. Consider how / why the thing is right Alt. Exact, precise
  18. Small – Overused word. Alt. Tiny, microscopic, minute, cramped, compact etc
  19. Some – Overused word. Consider removing or being precise For example. Some eggs = A dozen eggs or Alt. Few, occasionally etc.
  20. Somewhere, Sometime – Ambiguous / Overused words. Can often be removed or replaced with actual description. For example, He left sometime ago = He left at 2pm/ this morning/ last week.
  21. Thing, something, everything – Overused word. Can often be removed or replaced with an actual description of the thing in question. For example, Her things had arrived = Her books had arrived.
  22. Thoughts – Overused word. What sort of thoughts?
  23. Think about – Alt. Consider, remember, recall etc.
  24. Very – Overused word / Ambiguous word. Consider alternative For example, Very big = Huge.
  25. Went – Overused word / Ambiguous word. For example, Went up = Climbed.

If anyone has more suggestions, or alternatives, please let me know and I will add them to the post. Happy editing everyone 🙂

48 Best Military Sci-Fi Fiction

Another great list of sic-fi works, this time military Sci-Fi fiction.

Dune is one of my favourites, included in my write up about character arcs here:

Use of weapons – best book ending- possibly my all time favourite, my write up here on Books that end where they begin: